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Vikie awoke with a start. A hand was pressed over her mouth, and she heard a voice say, “sshh!” She faintly made out the shape of Noodles above her. “I’m going to take you to Iyzor,” he whispered. She nodded, and he let her up.

It had taken Noodles hours to work his way around to the Queen’s Chambers. Since Kathaarian’s seizure of power, she had more or less been confined to her room. Two Inquisitors were posted outside her room to keep watch on her, and everyone going in or out was searched. He had taken care of the problem by getting a revolutionary to distract them, whilst he stuck a knife in their backs.

The Wizard had agreed to help them, just as Noodles knew he would. There is nothing as weak as a man who has his heart threatened, and it was well known that he was very fond of the Princess. Some had wondered whether this would go as far as threatening the very existence of The Tower itself, but Noodles knew. Either he would attempt pathetically to double-cross them, or he would help, a broken man. Noodles knew exactly what he was facing, and was fully prepared to deal with it. Nothing would hold them back. Nothing.

Leading Vikie by the hand, he stepped over the corpses of the Inquisitors, and went to the secret passage by which they had gotten that far. The other revolutionaries followed, leaving the bodies where they lay.

*

Radagast looked at Rio worriedly. Ever since that…thing had attached itself to him, his friend hadn’t been the same. He walked ahead of them tirelessly, occasionally twisting the head on his arm to look back at them, making sure that they were following. He glanced at Dead Machine, stomping along beside him, and wondered which was the more human of the pair, the robot with his human intelligence, or Rio, with the parasite controlling him. Speeding up a little, he flicked the thing’s head as it twisted to stare at him with those empty eyes, and Rio’s entire body shuddered. He stopped and turned to face Radgast, holding his arm up so the head was upright, and it spoke to him.

Later, he could not remember exactly what it said, but the overriding feeling of the words resounding in his head opened a darkness inside him he had never before felt. Lurching forwards blindly, he grasped it and tried to throttle it, succeeding only in squeezing Rio’s arm. He lost his grip almost immediately as with his old arm, Rio punched him in the face, knocking him over.

He watched from the mud as Rio walked away, stroking the abomination and crooning to it. He shuddered as Rio lifted it to his face and gently kissed it on its thin, white lips. The kiss lingered, and he found himself blushing, shamed by watching it, like a peeping tom spying on a loving couple sharing a private moment.

Turning away, he saw that Dead Machine wasn’t looking at either of them, but was instead regarding the path forwards. In the distance, a dark shape could be seen. “What is it?” he asked the robot, but it didn’t answer. He looked back at Rio and jumped, for his friend was standing right next to him. “Sorry about that,” he said apologetically. “Such a bad temper I have!” he giggled, and a small tittering noise came from the other head. It stopped when it saw Radagast looking at it with disgust, and considered him silently, twisting around to keep him in vision when Rio turned to continue going.

As they travelled on, the pathway became wider, and the surroundings less damp. They were moving out of the swamp at last. Plants began to appear, birds flying overhead, even trees. The further they went, the more trees there were, until at last they seemed to be in a forest. Dead Machine stopped, and scanned the area. “Welcome,” he said, “to The Forest Of Impaled.”

*

The Elder God Gr’nd Kore looked up into the sun unflinchingly. His eyes, like black pools of molten lead, opened a little wider to allow the faint heat to warm his pupils. Looking down at a tree, he set it alight with the heat of the sun. A voice whispered in the back of his mind, and he rolled his huge head to look into the distance, where The Tower was. With a snarl that shook the land, he moved on towards it, his final goal.

To be continued...


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...how did I not notice this until now? I think I need new glasses.

Wondrous, Zadok. Please keep writing.


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How about Dead Machine transforming into a nice ride? :D


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Misha wrote:
How about Dead Machine transforming into a nice ride? :D


Pimp my DeadMachine? :D

Awsome stuff (even though I'm not in it! :x :P)

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Two Inquisitors were posted outside her room to keep watch on her, and everyone going in or out was searched. He had taken care of the problem by getting a revolutionary to distract them, whilst he stuck a knife in their backs.

yay i killed someone!!!


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The asylum as an institution must be one of the most depressing in existence. Cold, endless halls filled with those who have crumbled under the weight of their own minds. According to reports of early establishments, the noise inside was "so hideous, so great, that they are more able to drive a man that hath his wits rather out of them!” In the eigthteenth century people used to enter such institutions to see the lunatics. For a penny one could peer into their cells, view the ‘freaks’ and laugh at their antics, generally of a sexual nature, or violent fights. Entry was free on the first Tuesday of the month. Visitors were permitted to bring long sticks with which to poke and enrage the inmates. In 1814, there were ninety-six thousand such visits recorded.

Things have really not improved much since those times. Certainly, the ill are clothed, fed, and attempts at treatments are made. But morally, is it right to put people away for viewing the world different to what is considered ‘normal’? What better way to forget those loved ones who have started acting strangely than to shut them up in a glorified zoo? It helps to overlook the strange horror as dad’s mental framework slowly collapses in on itself, clouds of dust washing over the rest of the family, impossible to ignore yet equally impossible to embrace. Eventually, it gets so bad that there is no other choice but to have the state take the individual off the family’s hands. The shame of it never goes away, however. The knowledge that just a bit more effort, more care was all it took to keep them conscious of the world around them will sit on the back of the relatives’ minds for the rest of their lives, silent but shouting louder than is bearable.

It is this that has led some philosophers to postulate that insanity is a living, reproducing thing. Like a virus, first one member of a family catches it, and then it spreads to the rest. There’s proof it’s hereditary, after all – this is just a step further. Before we’re aware of it, the world will be aflame with madmen, breeding like rabbits, passing the madness on to their offspring, and at the same time driving everyone around them insane…

The future, ladies and gentlemen. Welcome aboard.

It would not be fair to say that the above was occupying Iyzor’s mind. Nothing so cerebral, oh no. Every inch of his brain was taken up with how he could escape, get away, both save Carnif’x and protect The Tower from destruction. He was not by nature a weak man, but at that moment he was powerless, unable to act, to do anything other than blindly do as he was told. The Princess was held over his head as a threat, he wasn’t allowed to see her until the revolutionaries had succeeded in their fight.

He raised his head and gazed sightlessly around him. His guard, a longhaired brute named Crast, stared at him. He had beaten him twice so far, once for asking where the others were, and once for asking for food. Iyzor meekly dropped his eyes, and sighed. No doubt another would have utilized one of his spells by now, but Iyzor could not, for the simple reason that his energy was sapped. Magic relies on a person’s spirit; how much they want to live. Right at that moment, the Wizard was as close as he would ever be to suicide.

Shutting his eyes, he slipped into memory to pass the time.

*

Inside the Asylum, Noodles and Vikie were lost. Dressed in medical uniforms hurriedly taken from two employees leaving the site, they had entered without challenge, only to discover that the lack of security was down to the layout of the building itself. The place was a maze, identical corridors running in circles that led to familiar-looking halls making up most of the interior. Eventually, they had to stop and ask a large, friendly - looking woman for directions to the Princess’ cell, but she turned out not to be so friendly and Noodles was forced to silence her - permanently. After hiding the body in a storeroom, they moved on, checking the doors they went past just in case.

This went on for hours. They eventually found an orderly who innocently said that the Princess was housed in the deepest part of the building. Noodles killed him too, in case he should raise the alarm. Vikie said nothing, but he thought he saw a look of horror on her face whenever she spoke to him, and he decided once the deed was done she was expendable.

Their entrance into the lowest floor (after wasting another hour finding the stairs) was marked by a bloodcurdling scream that came from one of the cells. Hesitantly, they approached to see.

On this part of the establishment, the cells were exactly that - cells. Rust-flecked vertical bars were all that separated them from the corridor. Behind these, they saw a female child of about eight years, dressed in nothing but a stained nightgown. She looked up at them, and screamed again.

Vikie would later remember that moment as the most horrific of her life. Not that screaming children were especially dreadful, but the fact that half the girl’s face was missing. The entire lower jawbone had been ripped away, leaving a gaping maw to wink silently at them as red droplets fell onto the floor, like a waterfall from hell. She retched at the sight, and Noodles hurried them on.

They went past many such cells. As was typical of her class, Vikie turned away whenever something awful presented itself and tried to pretend that it didn’t exist, relying on Noodles to lead her onwards. This nightmarish journey went on for several hours, and the screams followed them on their path, burnt forever into their subconscious. Finally, Noodles recognised the figure of the Princess in one of the cells, and they stopped.

The bars were corroded and brittle enough to snap when Noodles hit them with an iron rod left lying by the side of the passageway. Vikie speedily lifted Carnif’x up, cupping her face in her hands. She was still in her coma, eyes blank, face pale and drawn. There was no reaction when Vikie called her name softly, or waved a hand before her eyes.

Noodles looked nervous. “Get on with it!” he hissed. Slowly, Vikie bent down and kissed Carnif’x on the lips.

There was no reaction.

To be continued…


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I'm gonna kick this Noodles' ass.


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Noodles and Vikie watched, hardly daring to breathe, but there was no change in Princess Carnif’x. She remained locked inside her own mind, eyes as blank as before. Vikie looked up at Noodles, and slowly shook her head. “It didn’t work,” she said sadly. “Do it again,” Noodles said. “What?” Vikie hissed, “With tongues this time, I suppose?” He had the grace to look embarrassed, and looked away. They were silent for a moment, listening to the echoes of their voices, and Vikie was just about to lean down and try again, when they heard a noise from down the corridor. Looking up, she saw a group of people approaching. At the front was the clearly distinguishable figure of Bishop Kathaarian.

“Blasphemy!” he snarled, and ordered the Inquisitors with him to grab Vikie. He turned to Noodles. “I’ve been waiting for this!” he grinned, and punched him in the face, sending blood flying. Noodles lifted himself slowly to his feet, and swung at the Bishop, who easily dodged it and kicked him hard between the legs. Kathaarian stood over the cringing wretch, and laughed evilly. Noodles struggled to get up, but the Bishop placed a foot on his neck and pressed down hard, choking him. “What of revolution now, traitor?” he spat. “What of your revolt? Even now my warriors are entering your ‘secret’ hideout and massacring all. You see the penalty that is served to those who stand against the Metal gods? Do you?” He lifted his foot and stepped backwards. Noodles gasped for breath, sitting up slowly. “The penalty,” Kathaarian gloated, “is death!”

Noodles didn’t even see it coming. Vikie could only scream helplessly as the Bishop’s blade swung down and decapitated the revolutionary. His head bounced across the floor, coming to rest by the Princess. Kathaarian stepped up to Vikie, and slid the wet blade down her cheek, leaving a smear of blood. “You made a mistake in coming here, my Queen,” he said quietly, watching the blood drip from her face. “You really should have stayed where you were wanted.” He turned to go. “Lock her in a cell with the corpse,” he said over his shoulder. “Let her see what it is to be one with the dead!”

The Inquisitor holding Vikie was suddenly wrenched backwards. As Vikie watched, open-mouthed, a knife blade abruptly grew from his chest, and he collapsed. Princess Carnif’x stood there, pale but most definitely alive. Kathaarian, sensing rather than hearing that something was wrong, turned and his jaw dropped. “Impossible!” he gasped. “I am awoken from the curse, Bishop,” said Carnif’x, grasping the bar that Noodles had used to break into her cell. “The True Gods themselves propelled me back to this world, that I might be their tool, their weapon in the cleansing of the kingdom. I am become the sword of the Gods, the wolf of the cohesive, the centre ring of the cosmos that will expand and suffocate all that stand in my way. No longer shall order and chaos be allowed to run rampant over the land. Now they shall be lifted and welded in my hands, to rule the earth as it deserves.”

Kathaarian looked at her, and a slow smile broke out over his face. “Come now, Princess,” he said. “We had better get you back to The Tower, now that you are cured.” He waved his hand and two Inquisitors stepped forwards. Carnif’x swung the bar, and embedded it in the first’s head. She swung him around and into the other, knocking him over. Before he could arise, she had taken his blade and stabbed him in the face.

There were now just four Inquisitors standing by the Bishop, and he started to look nervous. “Kill the madwoman,” he hissed, and turning, walked away. The Inquisitors started forwards, and the Princess attacked. Parrying a strike from the first, she kicked another in the knee, breaking his leg. He howled and fell onto a thrust that she dodged, burying her sword in another.

Freeing her sword, she stood back, allowing the remaining two to come to her. They approached cautiously, abreast of one another, and she retreated slowly, until she was backed up against some bars. They raised their swords to attack, but never landed the blows, as Vikie stabbed one from behind with a knife she had taken from one of the fallen, and Carnif’x decapitated the other.

Carnif’x moved immediately after the Bishop, but turned when she saw that Vikie was not following. She had dropped the knife and was busy throwing up, the reality of the blood on her hands proving too much for her. Feeling the Princess’ hand on her shoulder she twisted away in revulsion. “What happened to you?” she said shakily. “What have you become?”

The Princess smiled. “You believed that mystical rubbish?” she said. “I’ve been in training since I was five years old. That was just to put Kathaarian off the tracks.” She looked at Noodles. “A good thing he died, really,” she said softly. “Latt’m does not need a revolution any more than it needs the Inquisition.” She held a hand out to Vikie. “Come on, we have work to do,” she said, and hesitantly she took it. They followed the Bishop, stepping carefully over the corpses.

*

They had been travelling in the forest for three days now, and the trees were thickly crowded around them. The going hard been hard for Dead Machine, who often had to blast a path for himself through dense foliage, risking forest fires. Radagast was quietly concerned for the robot, his feet seemed to be rusting after their damp journey in the swamp, and strange clunking noises could be heard from deep inside. He glanced at Rio, who had not uttered a word for two days, except some strange hissing noises directed at the head on his arm. All of a sudden, Rio stopped walking, and turned to look at him. He gasped to see that his friend’s face was growing pale, like the one on his arm, and his eyes were going translucent. “Must have water!” Rio croaked, speaking simultaneously from both heads. Radagast gave him a gourd, and quickly he poured the precious liquid down the creature’s throat. It dribbled a little out down its chin, which Rio quickly licked off.

Radagast turned away in disgust, and walked over to the robot. He was about to say something, but then was silent when he saw Rio watching them suspiciously. “Shall we move on?” asked Dead Machine, and Radagast nodded. Just then, Rio sprang forwards, and the head on his arm seemed to stretch out towards him. He shouted in shock and batted it down, but his arm passed through air, and the creature’s face touched his.

Radagast was plunged into darkness. He looked wildly about for a way out, but saw nothing. Quietly, he heard Rio’s voice laughing, and he swung blindly with his arms, again feeling nothing. There was a muffled noise, and he was back in the forest. Rio was on the floor, unconscious, Dead Machine standing over him. Focusing, Radagast looked at the robot. “He attacked you,” said Dead Machine apologetically.

Feeling his face, Radagast’s fingers discovered a bloody hole where his nose once was. He felt no pain at all, not even strangeness from breathing through the hole. “I think it has evolved some kind of numbing venom,” the robot continued, kicking at Rio’s arm. “It bit my nose off?” Radagast said, still not believing it, and the robot nodded.

Rio coughed suddenly, making him jump, and he raised his head slowly. “What happened?” he asked slowly, and then gasped when he saw Radagast’s face. The creature on his arm came to, and swinging around, grinned evilly when it saw Radagast. Rio’s face twisted slightly, and then was blank, staring up at his friend with a faintly amused glint in his eyes. “I think you dropped something,” he said, and lifting his arm up, the head spat out Radagast’s nose into his hand.

Rio got up, ignoring Radagast, and started walking again. Dead Machine moved to block his way. “That serpent is twisting your mind,” he boomed. From the end of his arm a blade swung out, and he advanced on Rio, intending to cut it off. Suddenly there was a shout, and the three of them were surrounded by figures with strange black and white facepaint, dressed in spiky leather. The largest stepped forwards. “Hails!” he said. “You are trespassing in the Forest ov the Impaled! The penalty is death!”

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Black and white facepaint & spiky leather... uuh, exciting!


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Thanks Zad, for reincarnating me, we're AWESOME!!


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