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| Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Mon Mar 06, 2006 7:37 am ] |
| Post subject: | Tourny3-Match 0, Round 0 (rat tail) OFC vs GeneshaRules |
Okay, here's how it will work. For the next 24 hours, Genesharules and OFC will have exactly 24 hours to post a poem/set of lyrics. The second both poems are posted, all people are free to vote. Please make your vote obvious, and be nice! Voting will end exactly 48 hours from now. 1 poem vs 1 poem One vote per poster. Happy writing, all! Now on tap: OFC vs Genesharules!!! Next up: Dead Machine vs Phyrwolf (Wednesday 3/8/06 -Thursday 3/9/06) |
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| Author: | Arthur [ Mon Mar 06, 2006 8:39 am ] |
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Are you going to make on of those poll things, or are you just going to hand count? |
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| Author: | Ness [ Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:12 pm ] |
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Arthur wrote: Are you going to make on of those poll things, or are you just going to hand count?
Hand count |
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| Author: | PhyrWolf [ Mon Mar 06, 2006 6:33 pm ] |
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I'm sorry but I need to withdraw from this weeks competition. There's just no time. Next week maybe. |
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| Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Mon Mar 06, 2006 6:46 pm ] |
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PhyrWolf wrote: I'm sorry but I need to withdraw from this weeks competition. There's just no time. Next week maybe.
... It's up to Dead Machine. He can delay your match, or he can take a first round bye. I can't constantly move people around. Someone's gunna get confused. |
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| Author: | ganeshaRules [ Mon Mar 06, 2006 7:22 pm ] |
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Well, let's go. Here goes my lyrics, in spanish and in english. They're original spanish, and my english is very bad, but well, the translation is as better as I can do. But a great part of the spirit was lost in the translation, for sure. First, in spanish: La oportunidad perdida. Fuimos galápagos nocturnos en la vieja fábrica Detenidos, absortos, sin pensar apenas Dejamos que los demás decidieran. Nos contemplamos en silencio Agarrados de las manos Dejamos que los demás decidieran. Pudimos ser héroes, ahora lo sabemos Pero nos atrapó la melancolía Dejamos que el devenir lo marcaran las olas. Fuimos estatuas de tungsteno, Fuimos parte del destino del mundo Pero no nos atrevimos a adentrarnos en la marea. El océano se detuvo: Restamos varados Piedras sin alas en el túnel del tiempo Dejando que los huesos se hielen de olvido. Fuimos galápagos nocturnos en la abyecta fábrica Nos apartamos voluntariamente del camino Al final dejamos que los demás decidieran. Now, in english. The Lost Opportunity. We were nocturnal turtles in the old factory, Engrossed, stopped, without thinking barely, We left that the others decide. We contemplate us in silence The hands holding tight We left that the others decide. We could be heroes, we know it now But melancholy trapped us We left the waves establish the future We were tungsten’s statues, We were part of the world’s fate But we didn’t dare to enter in the tide. The ocean stopped: we stand stranded Stones without wings in the time tunnel We left that the bones freeze by the oblivion. We were nocturnal turtles in the abject factory We set apart voluntarily of the road In the end we left that the others decide. |
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| Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 12:23 am ] |
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Good stuff, Genesharules! Here's mine. And the second I post this, people are permitted to vote! Digger Eyes bearing lead heavy shields Shield not the mind Against lightning terror in a syrupy dreamland Where micro-sleep is fatal In another bout, “hero” sees Mother Brother, Father, wife, other lovers Confrontations of life and death And world wide collapse steals his breath Once, Twice, now countless times removed from hell This simulated apnea of oh, so insistent sleep Serves him well in a reality Where the “reality of things” entails… …A method or 2 to cope in the slightly more suitable plain “When determination meets a rusty shovel There’s no limit to what you can bury” He ambitiously sang during the fun part Before the fatigue, where more was bitten than chewable Before the sinking, swallowing, gaping chasms Shrinking corridors, binding walls A host of vomit weeping, shrieking visages Warn the centerpiece of it all that air is now stone Inhaling sweet reality again Bloodshot eyes adapt to the brightening night Sleep again, and air is now a new compound Combined with the reek of rot… “They should be below by now” “And I’ve lost too much time” GODDAMN THEM, their GODDAMN FACES And if only it wasn’t for GODDAMN GASOLINE’S INCONSISTANCY 1,000,000 mares later His task complete, maybe or maybe not Aching orbs shield themselves from first light Inside they gaze upon the very beautiful… Small Note: I think Digger is already the name of some song, somewhere, but this is NOT a revised set of lyrics for that song. |
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| Author: | Dead Machine [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 1:51 am ] |
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NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote: PhyrWolf wrote: I'm sorry but I need to withdraw from this weeks competition. There's just no time. Next week maybe. ... It's up to Dead Machine. He can delay your match, or he can take a first round bye. I can't constantly move people around. Someone's gunna get confused. Whatever results in me eventually getting to face someone. I'm certainly not leaving. As for the lyrics... both have drawbacks. NFAE's don't flow so well, and I also have no idea what's going on... but on the other hand, I don't know Spanish, and the english translation of Ganesha's doesn't flow well either... so coin toss it is. Heads, NFAE it is. |
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| Author: | Ness [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 2:11 am ] |
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I'll go with ganeshaRules for his effort. I'm not 100% sure what the poem is about, but I admire effort. Sorry OFC. |
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| Author: | Arthur [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 7:40 am ] |
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Quote: “When determination meets a rusty shovel
There’s no limit to what you can bury” Out of all of those verses, this part got my attention. My vote is for New Friend Ancient Enemy. |
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| Author: | Kathaarian [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 7:46 am ] |
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It's NFAE for me though Ganesha's had a mystical feeling to it and was very good also. |
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| Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 8:04 am ] |
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Well, voting can begin at any point after both competitors have posted their stuff, but I'm just letting everyone know that 24 (23 and a half, actually) remain in the actual voting period. Oh, and Aaron, I think I have a solution that will make you and me very happy. Yeah, sucks to see Phyrwolf out, but that means someone has to honor his role as the reserve poet. Stefan, that's you buddy! You and Aaron, Wednesday! Who-Hah! :shock: :shock: 
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| Author: | crast [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 8:31 am ] |
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Ganesha gets my vote! Me gusta! 
.:c:. |
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| Author: | Anonymous [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 12:34 pm ] |
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OFC gets my vote. |
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| Author: | lizardtail [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 1:17 pm ] |
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I'll vote for OFC I think, although I see good ideas in both pieces. interestingly, Ganesha's poem is actually of opposite philosophy to the one I'll be posting later on in the contest. |
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| Author: | Carnifex Umbris [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 4:09 pm ] |
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OFC from me. |
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| Author: | Goat [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:12 pm ] |
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I vote ganeshaRules, although it was a hard choice. |
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| Author: | Fingon [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 8:52 pm ] |
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very close..i like both because i love/write bizarre lyrics, poems and stories as well..after excessive thinking my vote goes to OFC |
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| Author: | EisenFaust [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 9:14 pm ] |
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As Dead Machine already pointed out there is a little 'lack of flow' in both poems. I don't know spanish so I might be judging ganeshaRules unfairly but I'll vote for OFC/NFAE. Mostly because of the somewhat wider 'palette' of different sentiments he used... |
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| Author: | Metalhead_Bastard [ Tue Mar 07, 2006 9:16 pm ] |
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I was gonna vote in school...But it's fucking hard-Ganesha's are wierd, which I like, NFAE's have a horror kind of creepy feel which I also like. NFAE, because the creepiness won in the end. Good work to Ganesha though, I loved the wierdness. |
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