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Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Wed Mar 29, 2006 10:31 pm ] |
Post subject: | Tourney 3-Round 2, Match 4(12): Fingon vs Lizardtail |
WELCOME TO ROUND TWO!! The last match of round two that is. I'm letting this one start EARLY because Zad basically has already won, but this will also give the judges more time to vote, and will result in a longer break for the poets. So, judges, go leave your mark on the Zad/SoK affair, then come back here. Fingon/Lizardtail, read below carefully. Don't misunderstand what is going on. I'm not rushing anything on your part. And now, business: Okay, here's how it will work. For the next 48 hours, Fingon and Lizardtail will have just that! Exactly 48 hours to post a poem/set of lyrics. The second both poems are posted, THE JUDGES are free to vote. Please make your vote obvious, and be nice! Voting will end exactly 72 hours from now. 1 poem vs 1 poem One vote per JUDGE. Happy writing, all! "Now" on tap: Fingon vs Lizardtail Up next: Round 3, the semis~! GOOD LUCK, SEE YOU ALL AT THE SEMIS! |
Author: | lizardtail [ Wed Mar 29, 2006 10:41 pm ] |
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Code: "Cable Tow"
(That which hastens the snow's descent must be fearful indeed.) Just as you've managed to set aside your guilt for the figure huddling in the snow, scavenging for the coins he earned with his beautiful voice, your meal arrives. After all, you've had to make some sacrifices. A man like that can only blame himself, his talent going to waste, falling on deaf ears. He deserves scorn. (Don't preach with your mouth full, little one.) The busker folds a paper bag into his jacket and endeavours to ford the slush. A car with broken headlights rounds the sharp corner, clouded in snow. The man's straggling hair flows in the wind, his deer-in-the-headlights stance amusing the cafe's patrons. All you can do is look away. (No, guilt isn't the point of this exercise, my child.) [Then what is the lesson?] In mute horror, you retreat inside to indulge in your own miseries, in envy of another man's death. (Look you fool! Bear witness to a hero!) [I see no hero.] (Then at the last, I see that I have misjudged you.) In these moments, our barriers fail, emotions runneth over. The mirrors that face each other are ever so tilted. Radiation of aspiration, sign-language gematria, These windows let in more than light and more escapes than heat. Empathic electricity jumps from one node to another. (You're in danger! Foolish boy, refocus your centre!) [I will not be browbeaten.] In disgust, you turn to pick up your coat. It wouldn't be the first time that you abandoned a meal. One more sacrifice for the elders. Outside lies relief and optimism. Unhurt, the busker digs out the errant car. The twice-grateful driver offers to transport but is refused. With confidence, you approach the lucky man, your favourite leather wallet in hand. He grins, too proud to beg, yet you offer coins. He starts to laugh. "You haven't even heard my song yet, little one!" He throws your meagre wealth high into the clear, unclouded sky; generous hypocrisy rains upon you. Empathic electricity jumps from one node to another. enjoy. |
Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 1:22 am ] |
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lizardtail wrote: enjoy. No. ![]() |
Author: | Eyesore [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 1:49 am ] |
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Lizzy! That's good, dude! You've got a little of my style in there with the dialogue and whatnot. Good stuff, man. I liked it a lot. |
Author: | Kathaarian [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:03 am ] |
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I vote Flingon. no, wait, I can't. |
Author: | Fingon [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:34 am ] |
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bah why even bother when all you asshole put so much serious work in this, there is a life besides poetry you know :roll: ![]() anyway: sth i wrote last night after 1,5 bottle of gin: Duysternisse kome (Darkness Cometh) You smell that? That’s the smell of rain It’s the piss of angels coming down In which we’re willing to drown Because drowning hardly causes any pain You feel that? That’s electricity in the air Vibrations that kill you cell by cell You know you don’t like it but do you dare to tell? Face the fact; life isn’t fair You hear that? That’s the sound of the Apocalypse The trampling of innocents in the broad daylight The weaker generation, too scared to stand and fight The flood is coming but can they reach the ships? You believe that? Following the masses and hailing the anarchy Raping and pillaging as your instincts tell Not knowing where your inner soul will be doomed to dwell Not knowing you’re losing your identity You see that? It’s you biggest fear, bringing the head of your daughter You almost choke in your own breath and try to flee No chance for mercy this time, can’t you see? The die is cast, begun has the slaughter You’re doomed, you’re tale now ends |
Author: | Stefan [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 8:49 am ] |
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I vote Dee (Lizardtail) NP "Serge Gainsbourg, Great Jewish Music" |
Author: | Carnifex Umbris [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 9:04 am ] |
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Dee (lizardtail) I almost voted Fingon, but he lost it at the second to last line (...begun has the slaughter). It's an archaic, awkward construction and it drives me up the friggin' wall. |
Author: | Fingon [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 9:06 am ] |
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Carnifex Umbris wrote: Dee (lizardtail)
I almost voted Fingon, but he lost it at the second to last line (...begun has the slaughter). It's an archaic, awkward construction and it drives me up the friggin' wall. hmm..sucks to see how i 'tripped at the finishline' but it's a direct translation from sentence constructions in Dutch |
Author: | crast [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 9:41 am ] |
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lizard the vote gets! .:crast:. |
Author: | Carnifex Umbris [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 6:13 pm ] |
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Fingon wrote: Carnifex Umbris wrote: Dee (lizardtail) I almost voted Fingon, but he lost it at the second to last line (...begun has the slaughter). It's an archaic, awkward construction and it drives me up the friggin' wall. hmm..sucks to see how i 'tripped at the finishline' but it's a direct translation from sentence constructions in Dutch Ah. Unfortunately, that construction in English went out with the Industrial Revolution. Occasionally someone will use it in poetry, but they're generally being pretentious, and it shows. Too bad it was a translation issue here. I really liked your poem otherwise. :( |
Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 6:29 pm ] |
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Both were awesome. Dee's is more obvious, but with more of a cryptic tone, while Fingon's is a little harder to imagine, but with a more straight forward tone. I'll come back later to vote. Actually, I wont. Dee just told a story, and it had no rhythm, thus it was just a short story to my eyes... it even had a little twist moral at the end like a short story. Fingon gets my vote. |
Author: | Anonymous [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 6:39 pm ] |
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Fingon. |
Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 6:44 pm ] |
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Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon.
I'm going to allow this vote because one judge, Sir W. has voted once... :? Otherwise, you would have had to wait until next round. ![]() |
Author: | Stefan [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:22 pm ] |
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Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon.
I smell a belgian conspiracy here ![]() |
Author: | Fingon [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:33 pm ] |
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Stefan wrote: Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon. I smell a belgian conspiracy here ![]() fuck you stefan! Just because there aren't any fags uhm i mean Frenchies here besides you and the ever so popular stub :roll: |
Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:44 pm ] |
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Fingon wrote: Stefan wrote: Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon. I smell a belgian conspiracy here ![]() fuck you stefan! Just because there aren't any fags uhm i mean Frenchies here besides you and the ever so popular stub :roll: Stub's cool. I don't get what people see against him. |
Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:45 pm ] |
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NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote: Fingon wrote: Stefan wrote: Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon. I smell a belgian conspiracy here ![]() fuck you stefan! Just because there aren't any fags uhm i mean Frenchies here besides you and the ever so popular stub :roll: Stub's cool. I don't get what people see against him. Oh, right... he's French. ![]() |
Author: | Fingon [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 7:47 pm ] |
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NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote: NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote: Fingon wrote: Stefan wrote: Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon. I smell a belgian conspiracy here ![]() fuck you stefan! Just because there aren't any fags uhm i mean Frenchies here besides you and the ever so popular stub :roll: Stub's cool. I don't get what people see against him. Oh, right... he's French. ![]() i don't really hate him but you can't say many ppl really like him. And to Stefan: Carnifex first intended to vote for me, NFAE voted for me, are they Belgian? i don't think so :roll: |
Author: | NewFriendAncientEnemy [ Thu Mar 30, 2006 8:00 pm ] |
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Fingon wrote: NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote: NewFriendAncientEnemy wrote: Fingon wrote: Stefan wrote: Slayer Of Kings wrote: Fingon. I smell a belgian conspiracy here ![]() fuck you stefan! Just because there aren't any fags uhm i mean Frenchies here besides you and the ever so popular stub :roll: Stub's cool. I don't get what people see against him. Oh, right... he's French. ![]() i don't really hate him but you can't say many ppl really like him. And to Stefan: Carnifex first intended to vote for me, NFAE voted for me, are they Belgian? i don't think so :roll: Yeah, if I was Belgian I would have killed myself years ago. That cinches it. No Conspiracy. ![]() |
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