The Semis (TOURNEY 3) Round 3/Semi 2 Zad vs Lizardtail

KinderGentlerGenocide · **Joined:** Mon Apr 03, 2006 9:23 pm **Posts:** 458

The judges are now:

Slayer of Kings
Fingon
Carnifex
Misha
Stefagan
Arthur
Crast
Metalhead_PETENESS
Genesha Rules
Sir Wanksalot (If he's still alive)
Dead Machine (If he's still alive)
And MOI. Very Happy

You four semi-finalists know the jist of things. This time:
Longer match. 48 hours for the poem. Match ends when all judges have voted. I'm not inclined to wait for Sir. W or DM, so consider all the living judges the full set. Collect em all.

Zad vs Lizardtail is right now. Good luck to both.

KinderGentlerGenocide · **Joined:** Mon Apr 03, 2006 9:23 pm **Posts:** 458

Here's Killer Zad's poem.

Zad0matic wrote:

Plastic Asparagus Tips : Part One
“Expel those flighty thoughts and seek to contain your spirits, brethren.
Expressed wishes of genius openly apparent on your faces.
Expectant, seeking the words that will once again ignite your souls.
Exploderise! But shut those eyes, you wouldn’t want to spoil the surprise…”

An epileptic, erotically anorexic ,
Eating toxic mushrooms,
Espies with a sigh the vineyard of delight,
Doors being opened for the night’s sights.
Oh! Lights so frighteningly bright,
Sear the mind’s eye…

Negative sun shines, a city of blind angels.
Oblations consumed for desperate survival.
In their fiefdoms they formed figurines from fire,
Distorting the truth to fit what they saw inside.
Internal vision capable still, harmonic corruptions
Obviously obvious, definitely defiant.
Deviant devils drawing circles in the clay…

“Applause, audience!
Approbation accepted.
A pleasure to open my mind for you
A portal to another realm…”

(Gina grieves quietly, wiping the tears from her eyes.
Sobbing softly as grandfather’s coffin is lowered into the ground.)

Bedlam break-out, the lunatics freed from their chains.
A meaty slice of seductive lust, gazing deep, grazing chafe.
Sapphic thoughts consume the male minds, sightless.
In the kingdom of the one-eyed, the blind man is the slave,
Cursed to serve the weak out of necessity of survival.
King over nothing, (ruler over dirt) monarch encrusted with filth.

Get her done! down from the deep, up from the sky.
Show her the meaning of life, with death as your guide.
Erode the wisdoms of ancients, with religion at your side.

(Gina returns home in darkness, meta and physical.
Alone she waits in silence, spirit and ritual.)

Take a look inside your self, you wouldn’t believe what you found!
I found her that takes my side, by this journey who is life,
Except shun, made by haughty, never naughty, always true.
Make an exception for me and you!

As he tills the desert,
So he still the earth,
As he wipes the sea,
So he swipe the ice,

Chieftain bran brew deeply drought.
Rich folk buy expensive bought.
Many have died, few have fought.
Feel sorry, not to we ought?

To be continued...

lizardtail · **Posted:** Thu Apr 06, 2006 8:01 pm

nice poem, Zad. I hope "to be continued" isn't a cheap trick to get people to vote just to see the other half..

Code:

"Cogency (or Almost Halfway There)"

Polite applause
is all you'll get
in this world, hon.
So please yourself.

Six layers of crushed velvet and
laser-highlighted sequins spray
glitter onto gleaming faces.

The jaws of tradition scream, "Encore!"
but no more confetti pours down.
They'll remember your opulence.

Time's up. Your lacquered-on grin runs.
Again you return to the page,
so brandish your swan-feather quill.

I. "Epitaph arranged for
the National Anthem;
no question of
allegiance
to your fellow man's cause.

Soon the Olympic flame
will dwindle and recede
and we'll eschew
competition
for comfort in an ice age.

So when they drop it next,
a blanket of dissent
will fling terror
into the air,
detonating harmlessly."

This canvas is too far stained
with the blood of predecessors
to ever hold your manifesto.

..and then, let's see you backflip on to your own shoulders!
..and then, let's hear what you have to say once you're there.

II. "Inscrutability is your
seventh safety net;
Irony is your sixth.

Sanity hops from juke to juke.
Imagine the will which
draws parallel lines.

Perhaps Pandora should have drilled a hole in the lid?
Elpis would at least be able to breathe.

You could be quoting puzzlebooks;
These curs have no time
for exegesis.

Discussion is a dance of veils;
All nuance gagged and
bound to the maypole."

A deaf diary - folly has drawn
your margins too generously;
now there is no room left to write.

Polite applause
is all you'll get
in this world, hon.
So start clapping.

III. "Your moral heptagon
means naught to me.
Solomon's seal reflects
the truth I see.
A pantheon of gods,
all dead but three:
Motive, trust and irony; motive, trust and irony."

Metalhead_Bastard · **Posted:** Thu Apr 06, 2006 8:37 pm

:? It's a toughie, I'll vote later.

BTW, KGG, why am I metalhead_PETENESS? Just curiosity.

Arthur · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 8:16 am

Fuck these are long, I have to take a break.

Eyesore · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 8:49 am

Exploderise? I can't find this to be a word. Is this a British word, or a British mistake like "disorientated?"

By the way, I like both. Zad, lay off the alliteration, you OD'd on it.

ganeshaRules · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 8:59 am

Well... tought one, I really like both a lot.

But I prefer Zad's one.

Arthur · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 9:04 am

ARGHH WHAT THE HELL DOES IT ALL MEAN?

Goat · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:05 am

Eyesore wrote:

Exploderise? I can't find this to be a word. Is this a British word, or a British mistake like "disorientated?"

By the way, I like both. Zad, lay off the alliteration, you OD'd on it.

I did, didn't I?

And don't worry, D.

Eyesore · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:09 am

Zad wrote:

Eyesore wrote:

Exploderise? I can't find this to be a word. Is this a British word, or a British mistake like "disorientated?"

By the way, I like both. Zad, lay off the alliteration, you OD'd on it.

I did, didn't I?

And don't worry, D.

So, I take it "exploderise" isn't a real word?

Goat · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:11 am

Eyesore wrote:

Zad wrote:

Eyesore wrote:

Exploderise? I can't find this to be a word. Is this a British word, or a British mistake like "disorientated?"

By the way, I like both. Zad, lay off the alliteration, you OD'd on it.

I did, didn't I?

And don't worry, D.

So, I take it "exploderise" isn't a real word?

It's not in this dictionary I'm not holding in my hands right now, so...

Edit: Shit! Why doesn't the "little writing" thing work?

rio · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:24 am

I think "exploderise" is just a comedy word used by Looney Tunes characters.

Goat · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:26 am

rio wrote:

I think "exploderise" is just a comedy word used by Looney Tunes characters.

Damn, my influences are revealed... :(

rio · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:28 am

I'm sure there are much worse places to take influence from.

lizardtail · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 10:46 am

lol I didn't know whether to laugh or cry at "definitly defiant/ Deviant"..

lucky judges.. since we've got two obscure poems competing they hve to vote for stuff such as appropriate word usage, poignancy and atmosphere..

Metalhead_Bastard · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 12:04 pm

I vote Zad.

Lizardtail, I enjoyed yours but Zad's was just better for me, especially sections like this:

Gayboy wrote:

An epileptic, erotically anorexic ,
Eating toxic mushrooms,
Espies with a sigh the vineyard of delight,

Misha · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 1:33 pm

Ok, I vote Zad, because he used A LOT of assonations, which I like. It flows well, and reminds me of some CoF like Dusk And Her Embrace. I don't care if you make up word, as a matter of fact, I like it. Dee's was great too but it missed some of my beloveth flow and rhyme...

KinderGentlerGenocide · **Joined:** Mon Apr 03, 2006 9:23 pm **Posts:** 458

Metalhead_Bastard wrote:

:? It's a toughie, I'll vote later.

BTW, KGG, why am I metalhead_PETENESS? Just curiosity.

Peteness is sweetness. :oops:

I vote Zad. Both were cryptic. Only 1 really left me wanting to read again. So, I went with that one. (But, I didn't read both but once, I mean it kept me wanting to read again and again and again and again~!)

Carnifex Umbris · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 3:38 pm

I vote lizardtail. His flows more cleanly, and Zad made my head hurt with "exploderise" and "obviously obvious."

Metalhead_Bastard · **Posted:** Fri Apr 07, 2006 6:34 pm

KinderGentlerGenocide wrote:

Metalhead_Bastard wrote:

:? It's a toughie, I'll vote later.

BTW, KGG, why am I metalhead_PETENESS? Just curiosity.

Peteness is sweetness. :oops:

I vote Zad. Both were cryptic. Only 1 really left me wanting to read again. So, I went with that one. (But, I didn't read both but once, I mean it kept me wanting to read again and again and again and again~!)

You make me sound so gay and innocent! :wink:

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