Metal Reviews

The judges are now:

Slayer of Kings
Fingon
Carnifex
Misha
Stefagan
Arthur
Crast
Metalhead_PETENESS
Genesha Rules
Sir Wanksalot (If he's still alive)
Dead Machine (If he's still alive)
And MOI.

You four semi-finalists know the jist of things. This time:
Longer match. 48 hours for the poem. Match ends when all judges have voted. I'm not inclined to wait for Sir. W or DM, so consider all the living judges the full set. Collect em all.

Oh, and the 2 days you have to cook something up? IT STARTS NOW! MUAHAHAHAH. (waits for someone to post poem in 3 minutes.)

Kathaarian vs. Eyesore is right now. Good luck to both. When all on that list above have voted, we'll move gently into Semi-Final 2. I'm gunna go update the bickering thread, so good luck.

Thanks. I think I will take my time to improve the poem as much as possible, it is pretty much finished.

STEFAN damnit ! :evil:

NP
Dün "Eros" (and, once again, this is good... you're priceless Dee ! 8) )

serves you right for that gay-conspiracy :evil:

yeah his is fun~!

OH~! I'm sorry. I didn't know your Judge Powers outranked my judge powers so highly that I could accidentially mispell your GAY NAME.

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hey, stop messing up my match thread !

Heehee, sry, the judges are bickering, and no ones even posted a poem yet.

Sryx2.

Hmmm...what to do, what to do? I have a poem I started years ago, but never finished much of it because it wasn't really my style. I just came across it again a few weeks ago and read through it and realized it could be really good in an Ani Difranco rant style. I don't know. Maybe I'll add to it. It'll likely be really long, though. Not sure. Hmmmm...

The Old Tree

A tree hundreds of years old
Dying today, naked, fruitless
Dying cause the land is poisoned
Our forefathers, they lie there, lifeless

As the barbarians they are, they came
All the way from far eastern countries
Even the world itsself could not stop this ride
Under their feet they crushed the mountains

The great oracle spoke "I've seen a vision
A tree sprouts from your chest and grows
Covers this land and forever we shall live here
We, as his sons, the Ottomans."

A few little man with endless visions
Swore an oath to be forever free
They sowed the seeds of a world empire
As they sowed the seeds of this tree

The tree grew wider, taller, stronger
As the empire dominates them all
Even the mightiest trembles in fear
As if we would never fall

But we did, oh, how we fell
The world shook in disbelief
Vultures started circling in the air
Our demise would be a relief

Now rise my brethren, rise and behold
The tree is dying, so are we
We must shed our enemies blood
As we once did to nourish the tree

Be proud my brothers, gather around
I'll kill all who flee from battle
You may choose to fight for your honour
Or you may be slaugtered like cattle

Today we die and join our fathers
Do not be afraid, heaven waits for us
One may die, millions replace us
For death is the servant of the righteous

Hmmm...I can't finish that poem I mentioned. It's too political, not my style. It was called "Wherever The Planes Land," that should give you an idea of when it was written and what it's about. Maybe I'll post it at another time. Anyway, here's something a little different:

THE ENDING, THE BEGINNING

I’ve seen the depths of depravity
And lingered on the edge of zero gravity
I’ve fallen before, farther than ever
From the land of milk and honey to the land of never-never
Cut vein, blood and sever, pull every lever
Switched on and turned up like the ending of forever
Nonsense, no consequence
Soul and heart subsided
Existence divided, I multiply it, don’t try it
Time is short, time is ending one second at a time
So get yours, I get mine
No more lying, only dying, just life and death and minutes
Of our life ticking away, away
Closer to dying every second, then
Minutes turn to hours, hours turn to days, days turn to years
Until nothing is left, nothing is left, nothing is left

I am the center of the universe, I am sickness and immunity
I am hatred, I am unity, I am evil, I am divinity
The cold and heat that is searing, I am Genesis, the end that is nearing
Everything and nothing
The ending, the beginning

In sadness comes death, in death comes sadness
You keep on talking love and life, but I’ve never had this
All alone in the world, drowning in my tears
So I sit upon my watchtower with a pistol in my ear
No fear, nothing’s left, I’m done with all the trying
All the lying, all the crying, as you sit and watch me dying
Tick-tock-click-boom, a message on the wall
Always at the bottom, never thought that I could fall
No more pain, no more shame, nothing left to gain
I’m crying out to Heaven, but no angels came today
Dear God? Goddamn! Is there an ending to your plan?
I’m hanging from the edge as I hold the Devil’s hand
As he whispers in my ear, and I dangle in the air
Human puppet, human man, human fear
And these minutes turn to hours and hours turn to days
Until nothing is left and everything fades

I am the center of the universe, I am sickness and immunity
I am hatred, I am unity, I am evil, I am divinity
The cold and heat that is searing, I am Genesis, the end that is nearing
Everything and nothing
The ending, the beginning

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Er...Kathaarian, did you leave in those misspellings on purpose? I don't want to keep voting pedantically, but.... :(

Take it for what it is, and vote. :evil:

Sigh. Well...I have to vote for Eyesore.

Kathaarian - seeds are "sown", and the carrion-eating birds are "vultures."

Willages!

Hey I'm a bmhead, we don't fix our writings. Akhenaten didn't even fix his albums name "To Embrace the Corspes bleeding".


Thanks a lot. I edited them, now they're right I hope. I knew I should have checked it before psoting.

But please tell me they're not the reason you voted for Eyesore :cry:

You're crazy. There's nothing emo about that.

It would have been a lot harder to decide if they hadn't been there. The first part of your song (I can't think of it as a poem, I can hear the music in my head when I read it) sounds forced, and Eyesore's flows well throughout.

Yup. Mine is a lyric and should be considered that way.

So you did like some of mine then, thanks anyway.

I think mine would flow really well with music. I may have to try these out in the future.