Metal Reviews

i wrote this... i think it reflects how i feel about my life and the world right now



omg i stole a nin song title >_>

A wop bobaloobam a wop bamboo
Tutti frutti
Oh rutti
Tutti frutti
Oh rutti
Tutti frutti
Oh rutti
Tutti frutti
Oh rutti
Tutti frutti
Oh rutti
A wop bobaloobam a wop bamboo
- Little Richard

For the first time in a long time, a light shines bright, swallowing the darkness.
To be still, to be free. In your arms I see those two meet.
Shackled by affection, sproutling with life, moments change our lives.
Years go by and I wonder why. What's it all for. And then you remind me.
Walking in solitude for ages, scared and broken. A glimpse and it's all fixed.
This is something in between, where it leads I know not. My wounds have stopped bleeding, but will they heal for good?
I forget regret and remember hope. Even if it's only an illusion.

My sky is clouded, devoid of a sun,
without a shadow,
I feel jaded and hallow.

overflowing with emotions that transcends understanding
my cries of despair were unheeded.
I am a soul of discretion,
a soul of desolation.

When will the light I seek shine on me
and save me from this meaningless
drifting existance ?

Im not a poet in any way and never will be, but after reading some of the good stuff you guys posted, I attempted writing something, here it goes:

I dig that. I think it is pretty good, actually.

Surveying the battlefield the fire burns within
Conquering the enemy his only goal
The hate that fills him will wrought a great victory
Much blood wilt be spilt today

With the battle cry the adrenaline is released,
Pouring through his veins
He charges now
Victory will be his

He sees the fear in their eyes
He is a dying a breed
A warrior of the purest heart
Courage unmatched
Strength and Honor his creed

He would rather die than be a slave
For his people he will sacrifice
His lethal sword shall devour all in his path
Heads will roll

He fights for his fathers,
The priests and maidens of his land
With a scream he kills
The thunder rolls

He sees the fear in their eyes
He is a dying breed
A warrior of the purest heart
Courage unmatched
Strength and Honor his creed

The enemies have been slain
He treads their bodies under foot
His people gather around
Let the celebration begin

A legend he shall be
Fathers will tell sons his name
Now more than a man
The warrior will fight on

He sees the fear in their eyes
He is a dying breed
A warrior of the purest heart
Courage unmatched
Strength and Honor his creed

She carries me through days of apathy;
She watches over me.

She saved my life, in a manner of speaking,
when she gave me back the power to believe.

Like a leaf she shudders when I touch her

Interminable patriarch of the nevermost depths, I kneel before thee in humility.
You expound wisdom upon the ignorant, upreach to the starheights…
Nonesomuch as approaches the eternal kingdom of darkness without thee,
By your name I reign, by your axe I rule, by your lifeblood I enchant all…

Pustules of doubt collapse into themselves at your footsteps upon the forest floor,
Yokel massacre in their chasmfall; the sounds of rampant murdery and suspicionhood
Clamours for my attention, for I am the only one whom listens to the voices
That whisper in the back of my head, seeking power over all. And for what?
Certainly not for thee, my beauteous one, certainly not for thee or thine.

Quiet – the stench of silence, like rotting corpses in my cellar.
Quiet – the sublimation of fortitude, experiment with my beliefs.
Quiet – abstract painting formed with the fluids of thousands of them,
Quiet – the subtle difference between life and death, that tells all.

And so back again, to what you have often questioned your elders
Vainly seeking the form that the next world shall take – Bible of sorrow.
And so back again, to my mastery of all but thee, my master in turn
Who stays my hand when the slaughter becomes too great to countenance…?

Enemy of light, standing firm against the rising sun
Not understanding incapability, such is weakness.
Falling to nothing that could cause inability
I am all that never existed, in one moment of time.

Knife's edge, sharpened wits, examine your deeds
Before I do - my visitations are not pleasant.

The night shall last forever, and the stars shall fall...

Sunrise progressing towards nullified existence,
All the armies of Time and Space cannot stop me now!
With a yell of triumph I disconnect the power
And the universe darkens, eternal winter arrived.

Sharpened swords, muffled screams, count your days
And find them lacking, like your own pathetic self.

The night shall last forever, and the stars shall fall...

Gutted sunshine, father weeping futile tears, regret
Negative radiation causing planet explosion, terminal
Disease reigns, millions fail at light's death,
Experience Armageddon with blind eye sockets glistening.

Honed edge, curved smile, notches marked and found lacking,
Not enough have died to appease the darkness, kill more.

The night shall last forever, and the stars shall fall.

Good to see a forum with some actual talent .
So I'll share the last thing I wrote:

Shooters at dawn

Words being shouted and creating new sentences before my eyes. dazzling lights that seem to hypnotise,
"Suprise, my dear, but we're only here in this moment, and you live in a future that isn't yours ."
It's my first chance in the last chance saloon and soon I'll find my feet, as we drink to the heroes and the whores on the street.
Soak it up before last orders and smoke it up before this borders on excessive elegance, a shimmering protest on sobriety.
I'm not here to fight but I fight for what I believe, and maybe I would've remembered what you said;
if that night she hadn't been wearing red and the liquor gone to my head.
Tonight there's no distractions, boys hand over your guns and act like you were John Wayne, raised by the nuns..
A lazy eye tells a story better but a tongue this sharp keeps our glasses wetter and if it upset her then appologise,
But her eyes tell you more than her mouth is letting on, so for this song the time stands still, and the glasses fill..
A toast to the ones who walk into the sunset, hit it once more for those crawling at sunrise,
An exquisite disguise that lady luck wears and as you dance with her closely, it's as if nobody cares;.
"We may not live forever and one day this will end, but while we're in this moment...we can still pretend."

That's good. More please!