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 Post subject: Tourney 3-Round 2, Match 3(11): Zad vs Slayer of Kings
PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:15 pm 
Just to make sure that this round is still starting on tuesday, as said in the brackets thread. The previous match is almost finished, so I thought: why not? Besides, I have a concert + a party to attend to in a moment, so I want to make sure I am sober when posting my entry.


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:21 pm 
Quote:
Caught in emotion
no sense of motion
I sit
I stand
I lie
Soundless
Blind and deaf
in a still life


But is it still
life?


Thanks go out to the guy who teaches nude model drawing at the royal academy of fine arts. He commented on one drawing of mine thusly: "It is recognisably a female form, yet painted as if it consisted of nothing more than a basket of fruit". And so was born the idea which gave way to the above poem.


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:39 pm 
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Sounds Opethy. :D


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:44 pm 
Kathaarian wrote:
Sounds Opethy. :D


Then I should expect to lose :(


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:47 pm 
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Slayer Of Kings wrote:
Kathaarian wrote:
Sounds Opethy. :D


Then I should expect to lose :(


Don't worry, Opeth has a lot of fans here and I like your poem, it pwns all Opeth lyrics.


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 8:07 pm 
I like it, but what's with the smaller font?


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 9:28 pm 
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Well, I wasn't expecting to be able to do this! (currently on shitty dial-up at home), but since Naffy hasn't posted my poem yet, I'll do it.

Here it be:

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I search through the library of your being for my needs...
Not a part of you, no nook nor cranny, escapes my gaze.
Meticulously I hunt, into no pit falling,
The solution to this puzzle inside you, calling.

Holding the universe at bay, I plunge deeper inside,
Travelling from the gate far inside the palace of your mind.
Opulent grandeur, beauty unbeheld even by you,
Your surface allure surpassed by a single internal view.

Inside every great artist lurks a greater monster,
Dwelling deep inside the imagination, needing nought.
Living instead from the host, feeding on memories,
Cursed never to escape the chains holding it with ease.

To release this demon, to open the gates of hell wide
And stand well back as a torrent of fury escapes its bonds
To make markings on the snowy landscape, strange patterns, swirls.
Together they stick, feeding from each other, becoming pearls.

As I read your mind, the beast senses, touches me.
We exchange wisdoms with our wandering fingers' strokes.
Slowly building up to illicit pain, benumbing pleasure,
As I reach the shadow'd corner wherein lies the treasure.

My insights are sucked from another's mouth, yet they are mine.
To sense the imprint of my lips in your thoughts is to taste me.
My caress cuts no wound, my light touch leaves no trace behind,
As it gently explores the soft contures of your mind.

Spreading you over this horizon is an experience
Never to repeat itself in the same form, each time unique.
My attentions have made you immortal like no statue could
In these words you survive, by all your divinity understood.


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 10:23 pm 
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Both are wonderful, but I'm sorry SoK... Shakesphere would toss many of "yours" over his shoulder, like random thoughts, all the while progressing his epics...

Speaking of epic, Zad. Dammit, man, you outdid yourself. Rhythm, flow, deeper meaning, and progression. It's complex, but it still comes together at the end. It's the difference between sharing a mental link with a bee's sole thought pattern and sharing a metal link with the entire hive.

Zad gets my vote.


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I'm voting for Zadith, even though I hate him and wish he were dead. :P


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I'm the only one that finds the second round efforts a lot less interesting that the first round ones? Any of the first round kick ass to the second round lyrics/poems.

Of these two I prefer Zad's one.


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When I read SoK's I was convinced Zad was not going to top it. The only thing I'd rather see changed is a chiasme in "Still life, but is it life still" rather than a parallel. Still a great piece of work. When I read Zad's for the first time, I thought ti was good but wasn't great. Comming near the end of it, it suddenly made sense and I read it again, great piece of work Zad, like OFC said. You get my vote.


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Zad

.:crast:.


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crast wrote:
Zad

.:crast:.


That's basically match. There are only 9 current judges, and that was 5.

But, we'll see how the dust settles, so we can know the true final score.


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Zad. Sorry, SoK, I found yours very dry.


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Zad the maaaan.


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PostPosted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 9:59 pm 
I'm surprised it's so unanimous. But I agree, too, that Zad's work is more ambitious, and that it succeeds its ambitions. Congratulations, you adorable Jew :wink:


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Wow. Thanks to all!


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You keep coming back Zad. Voodoo ?


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Kathaarian wrote:
You keep coming back Zad. Voodoo ?


Jew power strikes again. :wink:


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0mfg teh Jewz are 5ecretly running the 4um.


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